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Review:slayground says:
Hey there! Here to review swap :)

I loved this to bits. Your writing style is absolutely brilliant, and it suited the mood of this one-shot perfectly. It's very hard to write a story without dialogue - I know, I've tried - and it's even harder to write said story with faceless characters (faceless? does that make sense? oh well, nameless I guess XD) but you did a wonderful job with it. I didn't feel like I needed to know who this story was about; in fact, I didn't actually want to know. I feel as if revealing their identities would have taken away from the impact of the story. One of the most wonderful and memorable things about it was that it makes the reader think after they're done, and that's something that an author should always strive to do, so kudos!

My first suspicion was that the couple was James and Lily, but then Snape and Lily became my best guess. But really I feel like it doesn't matter who they are; the meaning and the impact that the story leaves still come across clear as day, which, again, was one of the many things that made this story such a delight to read.

And the woman in this story (who I can't help but think of as Lily, but I'm just going to stay general for now) was characterized so wonderfully. She was almost like a phantom to me, like she was almost real, but never really was. I don't know if that makes any sense or not, but what I'm trying to say was that how you described her made her almost tangible, like she existed in my real life. When you described her lying on the bed, reading The Adventures of Merlin I almost felt like I could walk up to my own bedroom and see her there, real as day. Does that make sense? I hope so XD basically what I'm trying to say is that you described her in such a way that you brought her to life, and I applaud you for that.

Two kids who just fell in a simple attraction of wants and needs called love.

I adore that line. Such a powerful statement in such few words. It's really quite poetic, and gave me chills when I read it. Many other lines in your story did the same - you have a lovely way with words that makes it very easy to read your writing. I don't have any CC for you, and I'd apologize for that but I really don't want to because I loved this that much. Such wonderful work, and I'm definitely going to be reading some of your other pieces - I'd love to see what else you can come up with.

Again, really well done. So glad I got the opportunity to read this!
xx Molly

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