|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
Hey again! And I'm so happy you re-requested:)
I have to admit, I certainly do have a soft spot for ScoRose and this one is very different from any others I've read-in a typical ScoRose Rose is pining for/loathes Scorpius and they eventually get together but in this one they've already been together and now, for some strange reason, have broken up. And I only say it's strange because it is clear to me that Rose still has intense feelings for Scorpius. So why is she marrying this Xander guy? Does she actually have any real feelings for him, too? I'm very curious to find out.
I really liked the reference to Rose, Dom and Albus being the golden trio, and then how you compared this trio to Harry, Ron and Hermione. I would love to learn more about the personalities of all three of these characters, and I really hope to see you developing them even more in the next chapters, because characterizations, of course, are key to great writing. Well, in my opinion anyway.
You do a really good job easing into the flashbacks without making it feel awkward or unnatural, and I love the background information that the flashbacks give us. Scorpius and Rose's back story is really, really interesting and I think you have written their past extremely well-and very originally, too. For future reference, however, I'd make sure to have a good balance between both flashbacks and the present times-and also be careful with your dialogue. I couldn't help but notice that some sentences were a little long and had commas rather that full stops or no punctuation at all. But that's honestly only a minor thing in a very good chapter.
I really liked the first meeting between Scorpius and Rose's family. The idea of Scorpius playing chess with Ron was great, and I love how you kept your characterization of Ron very true to the books.
Overall, I think this was a great chapter, and I'm very interested to find out what happens next.
Author's Response: Hey Courtney thanks for another lovely review!
I'm glad that you found this story different to other Scorose's as that's my aim for this story. I guess with the whole Rose/Scorpius/Xander love triangle, it will probably become clearer in the next chapter, as it does have quite a few reasons. And I guess I can say this, Rose does like Xander she's just very confused, as she only got together with him straight after breaking up with Scorpius so it too her a long time for her to get used to that, so she's still kind of doubting it.
Yeah I realised that this is next gen, so why not make a joke about their being a next generation of the golden trio. Yeah I do feel bad about kind of ignoring Dom and Al considering their her best friends, so I'll make sure they feature more in the next chapter :D
And with this chapter I leant more towards the flashbacks than the present, so I'll make it more in the present, and you can learn more about Dom and Al that way ;D
I've just edited this chapter, so hopefully those grammar issues have gone!
I'm glad that you liked the first meeting, as I wasn't sure whether to include that scene or not, so yay! And I'm glad that you found Ron was true to his original version as I like to try and stick to the way JK portrayed them.
Thanks for the great review, as it was really helpful, and I'll keep in mind the suggestions! The next chapter should be up next week, so you'll see me back then! Kiana