Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:ChaosWednesday says:

I must confess I just love Snape. My friends once even tried setting me up with a guy because he looked like young Snape, haha. Needless to say, reality just doesn't cut it and the date was a disaster!

I find Snape and Lily's friendship to be really intriguing and open for much speculation. That said, this was a wonderful interpretation. I always thought that Snape was so entranced by Lily because she was very different from him and that he held onto his love for her all those years because he could think of nothing more pure and good to serve as a beacon. And here, you add a wonderful new dimension! Lily as the first woman (well, girl) he meets that shows the courage he found to be so lacking in his mother is a strangely touching and realistic idea. It makes sense that he would transfer his love from his motehr to Lily under such circumstances. Wonderful twist, really!

Although I liked the style and the structure of this one-shot, the first part, in my opinion, could use a little bit of work. While there really is no other way to describe the terror of a towering, tyrannical father figure, I found that the descriptions got a bit carried away and self-indulgent at times. For example this : "Still years away from being old enough to possess your own wand… but you were already fighting a war that you could never win. Trying to stay sane in a world that wanted to take away everything that kept you together." It's only my opinion, but it seemed very general and a tad over the top. Maybe a few more details of what characterized the father could balance out this sentence. Later your mention the passed-down shirt. Maybe some more such details could make the first part come to life :)

Well, this was wonderful and I enjoyed it! Cheers!

Author's Response: HI darling! Hahah well at least your friend tried, right?

Honestly, I'm not a Snape person. But the friend I wrote this for IS, so I tried my best :P

I'm so happy you liked how I have their friendship forming here. It made sense to me, with the way Snape feels about Lily, that he would have almost put an unhealthy sort of attachment on her. She was everything he never had. Strength. Dependability. And like you said, he transferred the love to his mother, who was starting to feel unworthy for it because she wasn't protecting him like a mother should, to Lily.

I do think this piece could use a bit of work. When I get in one of those dark twisty moods (the only ones suited for writing this kind of thing, of course), I'll absolutely keep your comments in mind and try to rework a few things and edit up a bit. I think the second section could use a bit more substance, as well.

Thank you so much for your review ♥

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 412
Submit Report: