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Review:aquabluez17 says:
Hey it's Mya from the Slytherin review tag!

This is a great one not really. I like the idea alot! Vic's reaction to the betrayal was very realistic though I did feel that it was slight rushed. If Vic really loved either her sister or Teddy she would at least think about it for a bit. I just thought that shock would have made her as vocal as she was.

Dom and Teddy both were great too. The characterization was done nicely though I felt a bit disconnected with them since there was a lot of action and not much description about feelings. Maybe you could have more internal thoughts on Vic?

Don't get me wrong. I really loved this!! It was amazing :) great job! There are just rooms of improvement which could really help make this one shot the best :D

--Mya

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad that you liked the idea, and found Victoire's reaction realistic. I have been through something like what she went through so I tried to portray everything as believably as I could! Well, I thought that since she had some veela blood in her, her anger would be the most dominant, so maybe thats why it came off as a little rushed.

I'll try and see what I can do about giving more internal thoughts on Vic.

I am not getting you wrong at all, I appreciate all your views! Thank you so much!

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