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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hey - here from the review tag!

I want to say I enjoyed this chapter, but it feels a little harsh with the subject matter. I will say I thought it was a fantastic portrayal of George at the battle once Fred has died. It did really get to me, I really hate that Fred died. His was one of the worst and most unexpected deaths for me.

The POV and characterisation of George at this point is great, you really get into his head and make us feel his pain. I loved the whole section where he becomes Fred, as their interchangeable. It's a really good idea and I really enjoyed it!

I like the way you move through the story, it feels quite disjointed at times, but that is how George is seeing it as he's lost Fred.

This was a really strong start to your story though! Well done :)

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi there Lauren :D

Thank you for your lovely review!

Yes, definitely this story is rather harsh - and probably a little too harsh. I keep changing my mind about things. I want to write a slightly darker story about the twins and I don't know if I can do that without completely ruining their characterisation!

Yeah, Fred's death is pretty hard for me to bear as well :( Poor George. I can't imagine how difficult it must be to lose a person so close to you.

I'm glad you thought this was a strong start! I will be rewriting Chapter 2 (because it doesn't feel as focused as it should be) before I start writing the fourth chapter!

Thank you once again for reading and reviewing!

-teh


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