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Review:Jchrissy says:
Oh!! Oh goodness. This chapter had so much awesome in it.

I love that you started off right where chapter 6 left us. It wasn't an easy meeting. I really liked Helga's guilt at not addressing what she wished to as well as her desire to cast blame to Godric (although even while she's blaming someone else wrongfully she still knows she is. Love it).

You continue to give her character a really intense kind of innocence. Even if she doesn't want to think herself that way because she's deceived Salazar, or I suppose just not told him the truth, she still really is. And now with this revelation. Oh gosh. It may have been very good that Salazar told her without him knowing that she's a muggle born or it may have been very bad.

This gives them the chance to build such a strong connection. A chance to really need each other, and maybe that's better to have so when he does find out (and we all know he will) he has a harder time walking away from her.

But it could just as easily go the other way. You've shown us the depths of Salazar's hate for people that commit a wrong against him. Will he consider Helga not telling him a wrong? Will he be even more infuriated now that he's opened himself up and confided in her?

Let's back up to the memory itself. You, m'dear, did such an incredible job showing us what happened while still having Salazar tell the tale. We got his raw emotions from the cruelty that he witnessed, and god that was terrible but amazing. You've given him an honest reason to feel how he does. But he still can't see that every muggle isn't the village that jeered as his family was murdered. But at the same time, if you had a child that was kidnapped or something by a plumber, I'm sure you'd never want another plumber in the house. Yes that's a weak example, but I mean that I get it. I get why he feels like that because it wasn't just one cruel man, the man that lit fire, it was all of them. They all watched two lives be tortured out of this world and did nothing. In fact, they welcomed it. How is a young child ever supposed to let something like that go??

This was a truly an incredible and powerful chapter, darling. Please let me know when the next is up ♥

Author's Response: Jami, hello! Thank you so much for coming! I've been needing feedback on this chapter, and I always love your reviews :)

One great thing about Helga is that she's very self-aware. When she does something she percieves as wrong, she realizes it. Problem is, that awareness doesn't always factor into the choices she makes. And you're right--she definitely doesn't see herself as innocently as other people might.

I just love all the thoughts you're giving me about Salazar's story, and predictions about what will happen. It will definitely solidify their bond, I can tell you that much. But as for the rest, I'm going to have to make you wait for the next few chapters to find out :)

I am so glad that you connected with the memory, because I worked really hard to get the tone right. This is the most intense subject matter I've ever dealt with in writing, and I really wanted to do it well. My goal was to get really emotional with it while also showing the readers how those events have shaped Salazar's personality and views. Hopefully I accomplished some of that. Salazar doesn't know how to make peace with the events of his past, and he's never really been in a place where he wants to. But Helga's going to try her hardest to help him, that's for sure.

Thank you so much for stopping by! I'm so happy you're continuing to enjoy the story, and I'll let you know when I get ch. 8 finished :)

--Maggie


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