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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hello! You've been so nice to review my story and I wanted to return the favor. I was drawn to this story because 1: your banner is awesome, and 2: YAY, Neville!

I think you've really captured his character, just within the first paragraph. We see the admiration Neville's had for Harry since First Year, and then the certainty and resolution he developed as he grew older. Then there's that little hint of uncertainty where he's trying to talk himself into it: "Yes, that had to be it." I have to say, I'm really impressed!

What a heartbreaking scene, with Neville talking to his grandmother, and her trying to reason with him. He's becoming full of rage and, like you said, bloodlust. She's trying to bring him back down, but it seems she can't. It must be so hard for her to see how much he's changed (because the Death Eaters made him change.)

I liked how everything comes full circle when Neville pulls the sword out. The story began with him worrying about Harry; the story ends with him pulling the sword out just like in the stories about Harry. And your ending line was very haunting.

Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Your stories are great by the way, and the newest updates are very intriguing! I have to give lots of props to the artists at TDA because I have no idea how they do it. And yeah, Neville is a beast.

I'm glad you think I got Neville right. I have never written from him being the main character/from his POV before so it's important that you think that it's accurate.

I think that Neville's grandmother was shown how bad it was at Hogwarts it really is. I would guess they used Crucio, and since that has been known to drive people mad, it must effect you somehow.

This is my first one-shot that I have completed and since they are meant to stand alone it's a little hard how to end. I was aiming for it to be like the beginning so I'm glad that I achieved that. Thank you so much for reviewing!


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