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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there!

This is such an exciting start! I love the small details you included that gave us a great look into the trio with Hermione still correcting their work after all these years. It seems very much like her to, even being swamped with her own, look theirs over. More to get them to be quiet than anything, probably ;).

And the detail about her going home to watch her favorite medical muggle drama was awesome. I can really see Hermione still maintaining a strong connection to her original world.

I think that Kingsley held the perfect amount of authoritative air without coming across as too stern. He worked very well with the secrecy, and it's obvious that he's maintained the position as Minster excellently.

And the cloak being used was a really great detail, as well! I love when those small sort of things really make a chapter. And you have quite a few of those awesome bits in this first one.

The conversation was as tense as you'd expect, but I was thrilled to see Hermione absolutely being ready to take on the challenge.

I also really liked that they never broke cover, being sure to make it seem like (as Draco left) his presence was anything but wanted.

My only suggestion is to edit your spacing :). Trying using simple editor. Every time you edit using advanced, it always adds in random spaces for no reason. But simple doesn't have that problem :). It's obviously not a big deal at all and didn't take away from the chapter.

Great start, m'dear ♥

Author's Response: Jchrissy,

Hello and thank you for the amazing review! Some of your comments remind me of one episode of Big Bang Theory when Sheldon said "keeping in mind that the key to a good lie lies in the details" To me a lie is no more than a story one has made up. LOL.

I'm glad you mentioned the cloak. I had a review tell me that part didn't make sense at all. Hmm... I'm glad it did come out as intended.

THANK YOU!! I have had issues with my spacing since I started posting on this site and I haven't been able to figure out why. I have also had a bunch of reviewers stating that the spacing was an issue in a few of my chapters.

Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a great review!

Meg


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