|Review:||teh tarik says:|
Hello shaza! Here I am at last, reviewing your entry for the Apocalyptic AU Challenge :)
Wow! This is a short but really intense piece of writing. There are so many gaps, so many things that are left unexplained, that Ron does not care to explain, in fact Ron does not care anymore. The setting of your story is so sparsely described and the reader is not even given any detail about the giants, dementors and death eaters terrorising the world. Yet the story is intense and brutal in its sparseness, because you've really shown the horrors Ron has endured through his thoughts and his internal world. You've done an amazing job in depicting the utter desolation that he feels, and the complete absence of any hope or any sense of escape from the present reality.
Your characterisation of Ron is outstanding. There's so much that you revealed about him, from his deep sense of loss at Hermione's death, and how this hollows him out so badly that he ceases to care about the fate of his in-laws, or of his own fate, actually. And so many lovely cruel details - the last kiss he gives to a dead Hermione, the way he has to leave her body lying there in the middle of nowhere, how her she sounds so much like her mother, and to that eerie rhythm filling his head as he runs: da dum, da dum, da dum. It's all very wonderfully done. Oh, and I really liked how you included Hermione's parents in this story. I was rather surprised and pleased to see them, although they did have a very tragic end :(
The ending was just heartbreaking, how Ron completely chooses not to fight any longer because he truly believes that this is the end of the world, that there isn't a shred of hope left for humanity. Sobs.
OK, well, I've really really enjoyed this story, and I'm so happy that it's been entered for this challenge! Thank you so very much once again for participating, and good luck! I'll post up the results in a blog once I get through all the other entries :)
Author's Response: Hey there! :)
Wow! Thank you so much for this review! I'm glad you thought that it wasn't too under described, I didn't want to describe it in loads of detail because Ron wasn't looking yet I didn't want to leave the reader in a sort of white room with no clue as to what was going on.
I love writing Ron so the fact that you thought I made his characterisation outstadning means a lot, so thank you! Hermione's parents weren't going to show up but I wanted to show how this was affecting not only the wizards, but the muggles too and I didn't want to just throw in any random person so there they were!
Thank you so much for the review, and I'll keep an eye out for the blog post! :)