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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
It's been a while since I've read Tom/Minerva, even though I love the ship. I was looking forward to see what you did with the ship, and it was definitely worth the wait. :D What's great about this story is that it leaves one thinking afterwards - I keep finding myself looking back at parts to revisit the imagery or language. There's just so much going on in this story, and it's been exciting to pick it apart.

It's a complex ship to not just write, but also to conceptualize, as you've demonstrated in this story because there's plenty of tension between the characters as well as between the characters' desires and their... I can't think of a better word: destinies. That especially comes through in your portrayal of Minerva, who fights with all her will against her desire, and what I love about her characterization here is that paragraph when she creates that metaphorical barrier around her heart and spirit. It's normally such a cliched thing for a romance, but you recreate the cliche by making it feel like an arduous process, like someone building a bunker. It underlines both her fears regarding his power (over her, over anything really) as well as her own weakness for him, despite all of the things he's proven to be. She can't change her feelings, but she can repress them, which suits her canon character perfectly.

It is mostly a story about Minerva, but there are also some very interesting aspects to your portrayal of Tom. That paragraph near the end when Tom speaks of his love stood out because the mixed pain and hope in his eyes has nothing to do with love - it's the pain in recognizing that his power has failed, that she's beyond his grasp. He tries to win her back with cliches, relying still on the thing that had initially drawn her to him, but he doesn't see how she's armed herself against that very thing because he's so wrapped up in himself. It fits Tom's character, but it's also something sadly and startlingly realistic.

One thing you do need to do with this story is check for typos - there are a couple of small ones that, while they don't interfere with the story itself, do pose a distraction to readers. Otherwise, it's an excellent story, and it'd be wonderful to see you post more Tom/Minerva. :D

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