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Review:patronus_charm says:
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Ever since I read Betrayal I've been meaning to get round to this, so I was glad that I finally could!

I love the flashback as the kissing scene was great, enough fluff to make me satisfied, and not to overdone, and of course very well written! It was nice to see the differences between Victoire and Dom, and I guess in this story Dom seems to be the one who's more naturally suited to Teddy, due to them being free spirits!

I thought it was interesting that you made Dom rather selfish over the fact that she felt bad over make Teddy a cheater, but not so much over the fact she cheated on her sister's fiance. It was different twist to a common story which I liked!

I love Teddy so I hated him seeing playing the bad guy, by not wanting to break up with Dom but still get engaged to Vic. I think it worked though, as much as it pained me to see Teddy being kind of evil.

Another great one-shot from you, and the only CC is perhaps write on set after Betrayal, to see how the aftermath was! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. I am glad that you could get a chance to read this too xD

I was a little concerned regarding the flashback so its great to know that you found it not overdone, and yet satisfactory. I always thought that Dom was more suited to Teddy as well ;)

I am glad you liked the twist. I wanted to show that the part of her that loves Teddy sort of "won over" the part of her that loves her sister, which was why she did what she did - and that was shown a little through the fact that she felt more guilty over making Teddy a cheater rather than guilty over cheating on Victoire.

I like to play around with my characters' personalities, and so I decided to depict Teddy as the selfish, greedy man who had such a "deprived" childhood that now he just wants more and more.

I'll see if I can write an aftermath to Betrayal. Thank you for all your valuable comments!


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