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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for review tag! (And also, Happy Valentines day Review-a-thon)!

This seems like an interesting plot, and I liked the way you narrated it all. However, the fragmented style was a little confusing, and I didn't get it all until the very end (this might also be due to the fact that its almost 2 AM and I should be asleep). Nevertheless, I like your characters, especially Amber. The way she was "narrating" had a humorous edge to it and I liked that.

I love that how your plot seems to be very original, since mostly the "bound marriage" kind of things happen in Pre-Hogwarts or Post-Hogwarts Era, but I never imagined it'd be in Next-Gen, especially not with James II. So I love the whole unique aspect of this, and it has got me very intrigued about where the story is headed.

I LOVE Death/the Grim Reaper and I think the concept of him is awesome. He doesn't particularly come across as scary though, so if you want him to be scary, you'll have to fix the way he "talks". But if you were aiming for a light approach, it definitely worked for me!

All in all, I think you have a very different plot here which is great, and I love your characters so far, and the way you portrayed their relationships, especially Amber and her dad's. If I were you, I'd polish the narrative more though, as it can get a little confusing. Apart from that, great going, and keep writing!


P.S. If this review came off as a little unconnected, please forgive me, I am a tad sleepy :P

Author's Response: Hey AD,

I am glad you like the plot and think it's unique =)

I wasn't really going for scary when I wrote him but more like Rumpelstiltskin from OUAT if you hav ever seen that haha

I will work on the narrative thanks for pointing it out =)

Sorry for taking forever to respond!

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