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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Hey there, its Gabbie with your requested review. Sorry that I didn't come here sooner but here I am and what a ride! I think the way you started this chapter from Devlin's point of view was really well-done. He has a very mature mind for someone so young but there were hints of the child he had been underneath the animosity. I think you also showed very well the difference between how Harry reacts to him versus Alex, she didn't try to treat him like a child, she actually spoke to him like she would anyone else. I'm really worried that Harry is letting his heart get in the way of what needs to be done and Geoffery was another surprise! I could tell that he does care about Devlin and that Devlin, despite himself, cares about him too. They're all they have and I think you made that very clear in a way that was just vivid and wonderful. :D
So, Remus bit Devlin?! That came as a shock and that little fight escalated so quickly but then...Devlin passed out! I can't believe that he's still suffering so badly from being cursed and tortured, but it makes sense. I loved all the detail that you put into that and how much pain it caused him and his parent's panic. There were so many wonderful emotions churning around and I think you wrote it so well! :D
What are Harry and the others going to do with Geoffery down the line? I'm assuming that you've introduced Hermione and Ron in this now as well? Curious. But that little bit with Remus, I need more information on it! So many questions!
This story just fascinates me, I enjoy the realism and darkness around it and what you've done with the canon characters in an AU universe. I can't wait to see what happens next for them all and how much danger they'll all be in once Voldemort or some darker thing gets in the way. And that ending! No, Devlin, don't try to escape! He's a sly little boy and he's so scared of what's happening around him but he's going to be in for a surprise if he thinks leaving is going to be easy. :D
Thanks for the read! Oh, and there were only two or three grammar things, everything else is perfect!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Yay! I look forward to your reviews!
I wanted to start by saying I am editing the story to up Devlin's age from 4 to 6 and then from 8 to 9(almost 10). I'll be putting a notice on chapter 6 and then it will just be a matter of editing the chapters. I feel this will appease some of my readers and it is a compromise I am willing to make - I won't change Devlin's character.

We all know Harry wears his emotions on his sleeve and everywhere else and I'm glad I was able to show the difference between the two. It's really important to me that my OC's seem real enough and especially Alexandra because she always seems the hardest - probably just because we know so much about Harry, so pairing him with an OC practically means you have to kinda 'prove' you know as much about the OC...if that makes any sense.

Geoffrey is fast becoming a favorite of mine ;)
Woot! I was waiting for you to comment about the Remus thing. lol I used to have a mini side story about the actual incident and right now I'm just trying to decide if I should post it as a separate one-shot or include it in a chapter.

"What are Harry and the others going to do with Geoffery down the line?" I don't think they are even sure of that yet. We learn a bit more about their intentions in a couple chapters, though.

Hermione and Ron will be introduced to Devlin shortly.

"This story just fascinates me, I enjoy the realism and darkness around it and what you've done with the canon characters in an AU universe." *blush* Thanks!

Devlin Escape? Hmm...Well, if I'm honest, I think Harry would be in for a surprise if it weren't for Alexandra who has made him ward the entire house as if they were imprisoning Mad-Eye. ;)

Can't wait to see what you think of the next chapter.


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