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Review:patronus_charm says:
Tag! And the first review, how exciting!

I've never really read many stories about Witch Weekly, so I was interested about reading this story. I liked your portrayal of it as it seemed very realistic, and similar to muggle women magazines, so it was fun to make comparsions between the two:)

I liked how even though Darcy worked for Witch Weekly, she didn't seem pretentious which is what you would have expected her to be like, as she admitted she liked the free samples, and wore faux pearls. It was good that you did this as it made her more relatable to other people, and she was more likeable as a result of this.

I liked the idea of the floo point, as when you mentioned she lived in Manchester I did wonder how she got to work. But I thought this was a really clever idea, as it seems like wizards may have used it as it was perfectly disguised.

I did find at times that your use of capital letters were a bit odd, like giving one to management and squib, as I didn't know that they needed one:)

I thought it was great that you put Lorcan in Witch Weekly, as who would have thought that Luna's son would have ended up working there! Kudos for that choice! And Dom being there seemed like a great fit, and I can't wait to see more of her as she's one of my favourite characters:')

Overall I thought it was a great start, and I'm looking forward to more! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Hi Kiana, thanks for tagging me and giving this story its first review :)

I'm glad you felt like my portrayal of working at a women's magazine seemed realistic, and that you're taking a liking to Darcy. I definitely wanted her to stand out as being sort of matter-of-fact in this world of glitz and glam. Still, she's only human, and she does have a girly side. I think part of her secretly likes working at Witch Weekly :)

I'm happy that you liked the Floo, too. I thought it was kind of cute, her sneaking into the pharmacy and escaping out the back.

Hmm, I'll have to go back and check on the capitals. I do think Squib is capitalized, but I'm not positive. Some of the other things, like Fashion and Witch Weekly, are considered proper nouns because they're titles or names. But I do want to be consistent and as accurate as possible, so thank you for the critique :)

I feel like Lorcan doesn't get a lot of attention, and I thought it would be fun to set him up as the "antagonist" in this light, fluffy story. I hope you'll like Dom as you get to know her. She's different from Darcy in many ways, but the two of them are good friends for a reason.

Thanks again for this lovely review :)

-Amanda


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