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Review:adluvshp says:
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Ah this sounds like a lovely story and I cant wait to see what comes next!

I think you have portrayed Rose and her doubt about Xander well, and I love the little flashbacks as they add so much more to the story. I also liked the glimpse into Scorpius and Rose's relationship, and how they bonded over the sorting =) The whole wedding scenario concept is also well-thought and very interesting, especially with Scorpius moving back to London, so I'd like to see where the story heads from here.

I like your writing style since you managed to give in a lot of information in this first chapter itself without making it boring at all. I am liking your characterisation too, and of course your plot.

You have a few issues with grammar though, especially spelling. For example, it should be "I cant wait to be your bridesmaid" but you wrote it as "I can". And also, you wrote "too" as "to" in one or two places. So I'd suggest getting a beta or giving this a thorough re-read to look through the errors.

Rest, this was quite good, and I am looking forward to the next chapter!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: You don't have to wait long, as the next chapter's in the queue :D

I'm glad that you liked Rose, as I've always had a soft spot for her, and enjoy writing her. I'm glad that you liked the flashbacks, as I agree they do seem to add that little bit more to a story.

I'm glad that you didn't find it too boring, as I would hate it if you did!

Yeah I need to give it another read through, probably tomorrow as it's about ten to midnight, and I should really be asleep!

Thanks for the review, Kiana :)


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