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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! Long time, no update. It's so nice to see you back with another chapter.

So as a preliminary comment, your writing was terrific in this. I didn't see a single typo or spelling mistake and everything flowed beautifully.

At first I wasn't so wild about the way that Brienne's friends reacted to her revelation about the killer(s) taking her picture from her mother's home in France. They seemed rather... dismissive, I guess is the right word. As I thought more about it, my feelings become more mixed, I guess. This is set during Prisoner of Azkaban. So on the one hand, with the exception of the occasional possessed teacher or basilisk in the plumbing, everyone believes that Hogwarts is the safest place in the magical world. On the other hand, Sirius Black was able to break into the castle and get all the way to the boys dormitories in Gryffindor Tower. I understand that they didn't immediately go tearing off to talk to McGonagall or Dumbledore because, hey, when have the students ever done anything that sensible in any of the HP books, but I guess I was expecting them all to take her revelation a little more seriously.

I did like the tense atmosphere that you created in the first section. With Sirius Black on the loose and apparently able to enter the castle at will, it made sense that the students were probably in for a long night of uneasy sleep at best.

The common room seemed like a refuge of sorts for the Gryffindors. I'm assuming that in your mind, the elves or their Head of House arranged to have some food sent up for those who didn't feel like braving the trip to the Great Hall? At any rate, it was nice to see the friends circling the wagons and sticking together.

Even at this early stage, the twins have different plans from the rest of their schoolmates, I see. I love the sense of self-determination that these two have and the independent spirit. I have no idea how far into the timeline of the books you're planning to take Brienne's story -- How far are you planning to take it, anyway? Assuming you can tell me without giving away the store, that is... -- but it always makes me feel a bit sad to realize that even in a best case for Brienne, something really tragic is lurking in her future.

Once again, her friends drag her kicking and screaming out of her doldrums and into something fun. Well, at least more fun than moping around Gryffindor Tower. It seems that Lee, Fred and Angelina are almost conspiring to get Brienne and George a bit of alone time. Or maybe George just makes the best of his opportunity. Regardless, I liked seeing the two of them together, talking about things that ranged from the frivolous to the very, very serious. Baby steps closer...

Wow! Brienne does an awesome job of turning away Lee's attempt to ambush them. Very impressive!

Meadowes seems like he's holding up his end of the deal, even though there isn't anything to share. I like that one. He seems like he's solidly on Brienne's side.

I think you did a good job in this chapter of continuing to move Brienne's story forward on a few fronts: her budding love interest in George, opening up to her friends about the threat to her safety and the investigation of her mother's death.

I hope your muse settles firmly on your shoulder and whispers in your ear with great regularity until the next chapter is complete! Nicely done.

Author's Response: Hi! Well, what a wonderful review xD On another note, I'm so sorry I haven't returned to COB yet. I've wanted to, but my life is hectic with job searching and various other things, as you can probably tell from the obscene amount of time it took me to update xD Though it really means a lot to me that you R&R'd. Thank you :)

Yeah, it seems to me that they've experienced a lot of drama (even second hand) at Hogwarts so far in their school careers. I think they know Brienne enough that they know she doesn't want a big ole' fuss over her, and that she'll do what's best for herself in the long run. They just want to help her as much as they can :)

Yeah, the twins are ambitious and determined, but they obviously haven't thought anything through yet.

Without spoiling anything, I am taking this all the way until the end :) There will be a seperate 'story' for each of the years, some of them probably won't be as long as this though.

They do really want them to get together xD Trouble is, they haven't made up their own minds yet.

Thank you for all of your lovely words and for your nice long review :) I love it! Thank you very much!


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