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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi m'dear!

I'm so excited that you've started posting this story! I love the confusion you've surrounded Cedric in from the start. It was actually kind of painful reading about his memories of his moms skirt swooshing along, only because you make his affection for both her and his father so real. We know that he isn't anywhere as close to as comforting as his childhood home. I didn't expect to feel emotional about this so early on, because I don't know Cedric or anything. But I really found my heart aching for him in this.

I was really happy that you addressed his life before the war so quickly. You didn't say too much to make me feel like you were throwing all these details at me, but enough to get a good idea that this young man wasn't born and bred for war. But that he made a very important decision when the draft hit Hogwarts.

This was such a powerful start, Amanda. I'm so excited to be reading a world war I story, and think that you've chosen the perfect characters for it!



Author's Response: Why, hellooo there :)

I think this kind of perspective is cool, where you see things purely through the character's eyes and your confusion is only resolved once the character fully knows what's going on. It won't stay that way, but I thought it would be a neat way to open this story, since Cedric's sensations are so much a part of his experience in the story.

It's great that you felt so emotionally connected to Cedric! I wanted to paint him as a young hero, the prototypical soldier who just wants to serve his country and meet a pretty girl or two while he's traveling. But as you observed, he's still a teenager, and he misses his family and the comfort of Hogwarts, particularly in these painful, weak moments.

I'm pleased to hear that you didn't feel inundated with details of Cedric's back story. I wanted to set the scene and explain how he'd gotten there, but not tell the whole story.

I'm so glad you liked this beginning! This is finished and in the editing stage now, so you should be seeing a new chapter once a week. Thanks so much for your fabulous review :)

-Amanda


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