It's a pity, really, that reviews must be kept 12+ because I have a few choice words to describe Rose right now...
HOW DARE SHE, THE CONNIVING HUMAN BEING?
Edie should have smashed a spinach puff in her face.
As for what Edie, is going to do, I hope she does it, but I'm also worried that Blakeslee won't believe her -- which, in my head, is more than probable.
But other than that, I'm screaming at her to go for it without any guilty feelings. Rose deserves it.
(The best thing you could do to Rose, though, is have her embarrassed by Oliver. Make Oliver save the day, okay? Please?)
I loved Edie getting angry about the cheese souffles things. I was wondering how long it would take her to lose her cool, and it's a miracle she survived that long...
This chapter, I think, marks a turning point. Edie's life was going completely downhill, and I really want to see it go back up again, hopefully this is the start of her getting back ino the fight (that sounds dreadfully cheesy)? I feel like reaching through the screen and doing the three following things:
a) Give Edie a hug
b) Kick Rose. Hard.
c) Push Edie and Oliver in a secluded corner, and tell them to, you know, breed or something.
If that wasn't clear enough, what I'm basically saying is that I'm forever jealous of your characters, that this was a fabulous chapter (but I finished it too fast, again), and that I'm waiting for more.
(By the way, stick with Ediver. Olie sounds less cool.)
Author's Response: Hahahaha. I know what you mean... Rose really just makes you want to shout profanities. Edie is actually a bit difficult for me to write at times, because she's much more aggressive than I am. It never even occurred to have her do something like smash a spinach puff in her face... even though it would be really fun xD I actually re-wrote this chapter last minute, because I originally had her just standing by, upset, as Rose accepted the award. But then I was like, NAW GIRL, THAT'S NOT WHAT EDIE WOULD DO and changed it. (I think I need to create a WWED bracelet for times like this--What Would Edie Do?)
Doesn't sound cheesy at all! (Especially next to a chapter that mentions brie, muenster and all kinds of cheesy goodness!) I think this just might be a turning point for Edie... but that's all I'm gonna say right now ;3
Thanks so much! It's so nice to hear that you like my characters, when Camille and Xavier and Mathilda and Helena and Kiwi are all so well-developed. :3