OH MY GOSH. OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH. SO MANY FEELS. GABBIE THIS CHAPTER. OH MY GOSH.
This chapter was brilliant. Honestly I think that was some of the best writing I have ever read. Ever. I honestly don't have enough words to tell you how amazing this chapter was, and how amazing this whole story is. It just keeps getting better and better, and you're constantly finding ways to surprise me and have me wondering where the story will go next! I'm really curious about Leo and the rest of the Greengrass family, because I still don't think we know everything that's going on... I have a feeling that this is just the surface, and even that's crazy! I just love the intrigue and mysteriousness of this story! The Greengrasses definitely have my attention, and I'm excited to find out more about them!
I really felt for Stori in this chapter. Her emotions were so pure and honest and raw, and I loved that you didn't do anything to soften them, or to make it less painful for her. It just made the whole chapter so much more poignant and beautiful. I got shivers down my spine when you talked about her nightmares. They really sound terrifying, which is sad in a way, because they're all about her family, and who she's going to wake up and see.
I thought Emily's character was really fascinating to read! She, like Stori, is so complex! We see her one way, and think we know her, and then she goes and surprises us! The way that she and Astoria argued, and how heated and passionate they both got in defending their opinions was so, so powerful. It's even harder because there really is not easy way out or even a way to compromise in this situation! I could feel Stori's anger, and you wrote it so well! It wasn't overdone at all, but still hit me really hard!
I was surprised that Emily actually took Astoria to Blaise! But I'm really glad that she could see that he was alive and able to rest, even if she could see that he's still in pain :( And the end of this chapter was so, so gorgeous! I could picture Astoria sitting by Blaise and holding his hand, and the fact that such a horrible thing happened to them just broke my heart!
This story is absolutely incredible, and I love everything about it! Your characters are so powerful and incredible, and I really learn a lot from reading your writing! Gabbie this was just SO GOOD. TFD is slowly coming along but I'll let you know my progress with it! What are you updating next? 10/10
Author's Response: Hello!
*Blushes* Whenever you all leave me reviews like this, I just get so speechless. I don't know how to respond, I get all tongue-tied and my face just turns beet red. I suppose being all "grown up" doesn't mean much! Hahahah.
I am just so flattered and happy and OMYMERLINING because you just keep coming back to this and making me feel so much better about it! D':
I think there's so much mystery and so many lies around the Greengrass family that the layers might take you days to get to the end. Its actually quite sad.
Leo is one big mystery wrapped up in a lie and I've still got a long way to go with that character. He's someone that I think you all will like, if you haven't already from just getting those glimpses of his room. Zonko's junk and all that reminded me so much of Fred and George. Hahaha.
But yes, there are going to be so many surprises with the Greengrass family. I think that I can't avoid it because you all are, and Astoria, forced to be in their house. And there are so many things that happened! So many things that are going to come back onto my poor little cactus.
You know, I'd thought of making it easier on Astoria but it didn't feel right. She's the sort of character who's emotions just speak for her and her family and the situation didn't need the softness or the sweetness. It was nasty and mean and raw, like you said and very hard to write. D':
I cried. Those nightmares had me getting the chills too, very creepy stuff.
I wanted her to wake up and see her family after those dreams to make a point. The real horror is only beginning and that little thing with Emily? How many times did I edit that?! I'm SO glad that you got into her character though and that she had more depth. The sister's fighting really showed who they were as people, didn't it? I wanted to make that clear and I'm SO glad that you were able to get something from it. There are no compromises in the Greengrass family. At all. Ever. Hahahhaa. Rawr.
Emily loves Astoria too much to tell her no and like she said, she can't stand seeing her so unhappy. I had to make sure that Astoria got to see Blaise in this chapter and for you, I wrote that part specifically for you, since you've been so worried about him. :D
*Blushes* Oh, thank you so much. That ending made me question myself, I wasn't sure if it was enough, but you've made me so happy. Like, amazingly happy. I'm going to start working on the next chapter soon! D':
*Bows* I can't thank you enough, I love your work too you know! (Write more) I'm all choked up! Please update TFD for me soon!
Erm, what should I update? Merlin, I have no clue. I might just go back to Abandon, then Albus and then A Force of Wills and some one-shots in between. :p Depends on my mood. Hahahah.
Can't thank you enough!