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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello, Laurenzo7321 here with your review!

I really don't know what to make of this! I absolutely adored the writing, I think it's a fantastic piece of work. I'm just confused because it goes against everything I love about this era!

I'm a huge Lily/James shipper so I'm glad you kept them together. I just don't like the thought of Remus planning to break them up. Please don't think I'm criticising or anything here though, I'm just trying to explain my mixed feelings towards it. I want to not like it because I don't like the thought of Remus doing this but I can't help but love what a beautiful piece of writing this is.

I genuinely thought it was James right up until the point of her stepping the extra two steps. It was a serious 'Hang on a minute - what just happened now?' moment and as soon as I finished it I re-read it and gave different meanings to everything than I had done the first time. You've done an absolutely amazing job of hiding who your true speaker is up until the point I mentioned and if you took that section out, you really could be talking about James. A massive massive kudos to you, you've done it so well.

I'm going to be honest, I can't find anything to give you CC on. Your imagery was amazing, the way you've hidden the narrator is fantastic and the story you've told is really interesting and could have happened as much as I don't want it to have.

The letter from Lily was really sweet, poor James for not reading it! I really liked what you wrote. I also loved Remus's plea that Sirius know he was lying. I think you've got Remus spot on there and if this did go down, it's how he would have felt - if I'm making sense?

I also liked and disliked the bit you wrote where Remus says he knows James and it's only a matter of time before he messes up - that the maturity is an act. I think this finished the piece off nicely and was a fitting end. I just didn't like it as the James in my head is all mature and it definitely isn't an act!

Anyway, I loved this piece! Thank you for requesting it - I really enjoyed reading it!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hello there!

First off, please don't worry about not liking this chapter! Confession: it was a nightmare to write, since James/Lily is my OTP and I can only write them and unrequited Snape/Lily... this was originally written for a challenge where I had to write Remus/Lily, hence this one-shot. I'm really glad to hear that despite your James/Lily love, you still liked this one-shot - it's such a -fantastic- compliment!

That was definitely my intention - even going so far as to include the stolen letter - and I just love that two steps further moment! XD Again, that was also my intention, and I'm so happy to hear that this one-shot was as successful as I'd hoped it'd be!

Aww, thank you! ♥ I mean, seriously. I'm just a pile of mushy feels right now at all of your lovely comments! And yes - you make perfect sense! :)

ME TOO!! But again, I love that you still liked this one-shot despite the pairing, and yep - James definitely is mature (most of the time) - in this situation, it's Remus' jealousy speaking.

Woo! Thank you for such a lovely review! ♥


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