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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello again :)

So, quite a few exciting things happening in this chapter! I loved Lily's little rebel streak, but more of that later.

To answer your AN, I'm actually not disappointed that you didn't show the conversation between Belle and Sirius. I personally got a lot more out of seeing their reactions. Sirius reacted pretty much the way I'd expect him too so I was glad James was there to help his friend sort his head out. Sirius was right though, I can't believe how cruel Belle's parents were/are. To put your daughter through that is just plain awful. The protective streak that came out in Sirius though was pretty cute, I can't wait for these pair to get it together! I hope they follow James and Lily's lead soon!

Speaking of James, I love how you write the interaction between him and Sirius. I've been so focused on him and Lily that I hadn't realised how much I love listening to the two of them. The part where James reminds Sirius how strong he but doesn't want him to get a big head and then Sirius say's it would do him good to see what it's like for him Remus and Peter - yeah I was giggling a bit at that. I think you have the dynamic between them pretty much spot on.

Poor Belle. My heart went out to her. I understand why Sirius did what he did, but like Sirius thinks or says while he's with James. She's used to people just walking away from her and now she thinks Sirius is doing it. At least she had Lily and Alice - I hope you let her have Sirius too though, and soon!

Gah those pesky Slytherins. It was good fun to read Lily stand up to them though, and come out on top. I love that she's not afraid to fight, I mean she was outnumbered 4 to 1! It was a bit awkward with Snape - I wasn't sure how to take him at all. I hate the choices he's making and he's only got himself to blame I know, but I still can't help feeling a bit sorry for him. He wants power but he's going the wrong way to get it. I'm really interested on your views on him and how you'll deal with him in future.

I felt for Polly - we're starting to see the prejudice come into the castle now though which isn't good. I have to admit, I was just waiting for James and Sirius to rock up and help defend Lily. It was a shame we didn't get to see a few more curses fly - I wanted the Slytherins to get their comeuppance - but the way you did it was great anyway and they got what they deserved without too much trouble and with a little help from Dumbledore. I loved Dumbledore in this once again, I always hate when he's not lovely, twinkle in his eye Dumbledore but he couldn't have been in this chapter - what you did was great. You also did a really good job on McGonagall. I couldn't imagine writing either of the two and you do it so well!

The ending was lovely after a fairly dark chapter. Lily just giggling over the fact she was breaking so many rules and getting in trouble with James and Sirius. I loved it!

I think I've spotted three little typos for you (I hope you don't mind me always pointing them out, I just feel I'm being helpful when I do!)...

'have been able to hand that' I think hand should be handle?

'Her instincts ordered her tighten her fingers' I think it should be too tighten?

'Professor McGonagall sent nodded toward the headmaster' I think you either don't need the 'sent' or it should be 'sent a nod'?

Oh, have I missed something with the letter to Alice? I'm wracking my brains trying to think if I've missed something or whether this is going to be a new thing coming up in the next chapter... It's bugging me!

Amazing chapter as always! I can't wait to read more!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Ahhh I'm so happy that seeing Sirius's reaction was better than the conversation. I thought it felt better too, especially since we already know how most of Belle's conversation would have gone.

You would think that after seeing Lily and James finally step up, these two would get the hint, right?!

James and Sirius moments are absolutely some of my favorite to write. I'm so glad that you think I'm doing a good job with the dynamic between them♥

I'm really trying to do a fair job with Severus in this. I have a hard time finding sympathy for him, but then I have to remind myself that this is through Lily's eyes, and *she* would have found sympathy for him. I think, more than anything, it's probably just sad realizing that this is what it came down to. Her childhood friend of so long taking a side that we know isn't right. I think that after he called lily a you know what, and he apologized... then she asked him if he was going to stop being friends with Mulciber and Rosier and he didn't answer.. that was really their ending. They both realized it, as much as they didn't want to believe it. But Lily can't stay friends with a person who wants people like her dead, and he can't stay friends with her and still get the kind of power he desires. I don't think they ever would have ended up together, but I do think if Severus wouldn't have made the decision to stay friends with the Slytherins, then Lily would have willingly forgiven him for what he called her.

Phew. Sorry about that rambling.

No! I don't mind at all you pointing out typos! I really appreciate it ♥

Nope, you haven't missed something with the letter to Alice ;). That one will come next chapter ;).

Thank you so much for this amazing review. I love the detail you go into, and just hearing your thoughts on the chapter always makes me so happy ♥








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