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Review:peanuts11 says:
I really like the direction of this chapter..

I really like how complex Sapphire's character is.

She's quite sassy, sarcastic but also quite an optimist, which shows that she differs from her sister because Amber's stubborn to the bone. I think you're doing a good job establishing the sisters as differing characters by the way Amber and Sapphire react differently to some situations.

I think you could focus a little more on the description of setting and people as you seem to focus more on the description of events.

Although, it could be said that it's in Sapphire's character to describe what is going on and avoid descriptions of settings.

I also really like the way you tell the story then go back to the events that lead up to what has gone on. I think it's really clever and subverts the traditional way that stories are told.

Can't wait for chapter 3 :D

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing!

I am glad you liked it =) I was having difficulties trying to separate the sisters but since you are say could see the difference I am glad :D

I will focus more on setting and people soon thank you for pointing that out!

Thanks for the review!

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