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Review:fauxthefox says:
Hello! I'm here for the swap :)

I love doing these swaps because I get to pick up such unique stories. This is definitely one of the coolest narration styles I've ever seen here - my favorite parts of the story are when the two characters' narration becomes interconnected, and it's like one sentence that they're sharing. It's also extremely well-written, and the style of writing fits the Founders era (I can't stand it when people try to do Founders characters in really casual writing) without being overbearingly wordy.

From your descriptions of Slytherin and Hufflepuff looking out at each other, you manage to indirectly characterize the two pretty well. Because the narration is so bound up in the characters' heads, it's sort of hard to get a good idea of the concrete world around them, so I'd suggest a bit more description to sort give it all a grounding.

This is really cool! Thanks for the swap!

Author's Response: Hi Faux! Thank you so much!

Yay, someone who likes the style! So far the reviews have been firmly mixed in that area, so it's fun to see that some people actually like it :) And I do work really hard on making the narration sound true to the era when I write Founders, so it's great to hear that you liked that part of it.

Thanks for the suggestion about physical descriptions. That makes a lot of sense, and I do think it would add to the story.

Thanks again for the swap, and for the great review!

--Maggie


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