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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review!

It was nice to see that they were investigating the house elf's death, even though Hermione probably hasn't passed her pro elf laws yet, so it was nice to see that the magical creatures are still being looked after!

I thought your characterisation of Snape was spot on, the way you wrote him was great, as you managed to convey his exact feelings of everyone being beneath him, and the part of Hagrid having not being able to miss a meal due to his blood sugar, made me laugh!

I love the Mary-Sue overload it's great to read, the way she made friends with the elf, and has great grades, she's so annoyingly nice and perfect, that it's just hilarious to read, and just the more and more excessive it gets, the better it also gets!

I'm guessing there's something going in between Terrence and Peony, with all the blushing, and remarks about pretty girls! Wahaha of course the Mary-Sue ends up with the good guy!

I loved the idea of Muggle hierachy, not the practise of it, obviously! But, I always did wonder what they taught in the Muggle Studies in the trios 7th year, so I thought this fit in perfectly if the lesson was being taught by a death eater.

It was nice to see that Peony was in awe of Luna, as I would have imagined that most people thought of her as a strange little thing, but I guess her being a Mary-Sue they love everyone, including the odd ones, so that is a benefit of being one, as they're nice to everyone!

Then the canon fact about Neville questioning the Carrow's blood, I didn't expect it to pop up here, even though there were all the signs, so this was a nice inclusion, as canon facts always make the story that little bit more believable and better.

And the graffiti at the end made me laugh, and it was perfectly done, it made me want to join in with all the rebelling against the regime, which Peony is oblivious of!

A great chapter I thought, full of loveable Mary-Sue moments, and it also provided a lot of laughs! Keep it up, Kiana :D

Author's Response: Patronus_charm is here!

But of course someone has to investigate a death, even if they do send a newbie detective in training to do it. It's the thought that counts, right?

Mary-Sues need their knights in shining armor too, hehe. But in the meantime, I thought I'd give Peony something serious to chew on in Muggle Studies. She loves everyone too, even Luna. But really, what's not to admire about Luna? She's got it all.

I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and didn't think it was overly silly. That's the one thing I was so afraid of when writing this: that the hilarity would run dry and it would just end up being stupid after a while.

Thanks again for another great review!


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