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Review:patronus_charm says:
Ok I'll be honest, I've never really read many Roxanne stories, so I didn't really know what to expect!

I really liked the opening, as it really intriguid, me as I never really imagined Roxanne as a person who went and searched for danger, so that was a nice surprise. And Roxanne being confused was great as well, as that made the reader confused as well (in a good way mind!), and it made them want to read on, and try and figure out, what on earth she was doing!

I thought your description was great, as you created really vivid imagery, so you could perfectly imagine the scene before you, which made you feel more connected to the story.

Me being a canon nerd here, so sorry about this, but the bartender of the Leaky Cauldron would have been Hannah Abbott at this time, not Tom. This was a really minor thing, so don't worry too much, it was just me being a sticker to canon ;)

I thought the forger was part of some sort of cult at first, but I thought the whole idea was great. It made me really wonder why Roxanne needed a secret identity, and needed to move to Canada, as it must be pretty serious if she's doing such drastic action!

I just have a couple of CC's, you said farther at one point, I think you meant further, as that makes more sense. And some of the paragraphs I felt were a little long so perhaps if you broke them up, it would make easier reading:)

I really enjoyed this first chapter, and it definitely has shown me there are some great Roxanne stories out there, so I should look out for them more often, Kiana ;D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I'm sorry for the late response.

Cleo


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