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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Hey! Whiskey here with your ridiculously belated review! So sorry about that. But guess what? I love the story!

This is why: "When life handed me lemons, I blew up half of Hogwarts and made one hell of a martini." Hahaha, YES!

Until that line, I wasn't sure I liked your narrator. She seemed too self-reflective for a mercilessly evil person. And there were a few Mary Sue moments. For example, blowing off arms as a first year? Yeah, how *did* she learn how to do it?

Anyways, this is a short chapter, and I'm not sure how much I can tell you about the characterization so far. One thing that did stike me so far was that there was alot of telling (as in, not showing). The part with the arm was good (althouhg unlikey, but it's your choice), but there there were many things screaming "look at me I'm evil!". Maybe more details and less self-asserting would have made her immediately a bit more nuanced? It's up to you, really, because so far it still works the way you wrote it.
I'm off to the next chapter :)

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