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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba back again!

I really like reading the story from Sirius's point of view! There are a lot of really funny little observations, like: "Oh, I've missed you, Minnie," and "... and carrots (I had to be healthy!)..."

I also like how bored Sirius is with the feast and sorting ceremony. It would seem very out-of-character for him to pay close attention to every little thing, as often happens in sorting and feast scenes.

The interaction between Lily and James is great, as well: "'Well, if you honestly think I have enough time to reply to approximately 5 letters a day, you’re deluded,' Lily Evans retorted." That made me laugh. :)

I did notice some more run-on sentences, and a couple of places with minor spelling errors, like the very last word in the chapter: "It was good to be home I though." In this case: "Not wanting to stand in the dizzyingly rain..." I believe it should just be "dizzying."

So far the story has my attention. :)

Author's Response: Hey Elphaba, it's nice to see you're back, as I love your reviews:D

Ha, I'm glad that you liked Sirius, as writing from a boy's POV as a girl was rather hard, so I'm glad that you thought it was fine! And yes Sirius wouldn't be Sirius, if he didn't bring the comedy along, and I guess all those little things, make him, him! And yes, I can't imagine Sirius wanting to pay attention to the ceremony, that's something Remus would do, as the good Marauder!

And Jilly, where would we be without them? Those scenes are always so much fun to write!

I'll go and back fix those typos and run on sentences as I hate having them!

I'm glad that this story has your attention, and thanks again, for another review! Kiana :)



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