I really loved reading this chapter! It was nice to get back to Roxie and all of her muddled up and probably kind of tiring feelings for Ben. I wish I could just go hug her! Everyone is just harping on her and telling her that it's his fault even though most of them don't know what happened! It's not fair, and I totally feel for Roxie. She's really sweet, and I love how you write her!
I also really like seeing Roxie and Molly together. They aren't two that I've ever read as being good friends, and out of all the cousins I wouldn't immediately put them together, because of how different their dads are, but I think the way you write them is fabulous! Molly seems like she's a really good friend, and will stick up for Roxie if she needs to!
I'm interested to see how Adam and his new girlfriend come back into the picture! I think that he likes Roxie, but I agree with her when she says he isn't really her type, so I'm wondering what will happen if she's ever faced with him asking her out! Haha.
I really enjoyed Roxie and Percent together at the end. Their banter feels really natural, and the sibling relationship they have is completely realistic and believable. They're teasing each other one second, then getting along the next, and then Ben just has to make Perce snap at Roxie and everything goes crazy! The ending of this chapter was wonderful, and the emotion was really poignant. I loved how you wrote it!
ASOS is up and ready for you to read, and I'm working on TFD, a one-shot, and hopefully I'll start a new novel soon! I can't wait for more updates from you, and I'll read your Percy one-shot soon, too! 10/10
Author's Response: Hello!
Oh, Cassie, its always nice coming back and reading your lovely reviews. They always make me so happy and its great to see you coming back all the time for my stories!
But anyway, on to this response! At some point, Roxanne's emotions for Benjamin will overflow for worse or better. I should probably tone down her angst a little bit though, I don't want you guys getting tired of her being so sad. But it makes you want to hug her! And I'm glad that you're able to like her still, she's a sweet girl I think, just sort of naiive.
I think everyone wants to think that Benjamin was the only one who was seduced that night, you know? Not that Roxanne intentionally set out to do it, but there were so many feelings betwen the pair that its too complicated for an outsider to really understand. Or something, right?
I never read many fics with Roxanne and Molly either and its a shame, it can really turn your character's around and give them room to grow. Plus, they're fun! Percy and George get along very well so it would make sense that their children saw alot of each other so Molly and Roxanne being close shouldn't be a surprise. But Molly is a very good friend and she'll stand by Roxanne no matter what! Its what's so great about her. :D
Adam and his new girlfriend play a role in this later on, actually. He's not Roxanne's type at all but he does have a thing for her, we'll see how she handles that later on though. ;)
Writing Roxanne and Perce is great! There's so much banter and love between them. But, of course, siblings do fight and spotting Ben and his dad coming into the shop just made things so much worse. :p
I've got the next chapter halfway done and for you, A Force of Wills should be up today or tomorrow, depending. Hopefully, it hasn't been rejected! :D
I'm going to check out ASOS right now and I can't wait on TFD and any new work from you! Feel free to read my LONG Percy one-shot any time! ;)