Jami, dear, this was beautiful. I have to warn you right away that I probably won't have as much to say about it as I usually do. This isn't the kind of story where you pull quote and gush about them. It isn't the sort where I can compliment you on your brilliant characterization and plot development. It's a story about five stories that have already been told. A lone narrator just trying to help the reader make sense of it all. That's the real beauty of it, at least for me.
I loved the voice you gave to Lily's laugh. She really is like a summer day in her warmth and vivaciousness. But you didn't canonize her either. You didn't canonize any of them. Each one came with their own flaws and weaknesses. Things that made them complete.
James, with his magnetic personality and roguish nature, was immediately recognizable from BTF. I liked the streak of broody darkness you gave him, though. I guess that's where Harry gets it.
Poor Remus. You did a beautiful job of capturing his tortured nature. His fear and loathing of the part of himself that he was never able to fully come to terms with. But at the same time, you found the happy aspects of his life. The warm, funny, loving parts. And the ultimate tragedy of a life ended just as its next, happiest phase was about to begin.
Your depiction of Sirius was masterful, I thought. Such a tormented soul. So many terrible things he was forced to live through in order to enjoy his moments of joy. The mood swings and mercurial nature you gave him rang perfectly true. And the horrible years in Azkaban definitely made their mark.
Last but not least, there's Peter. I (grudgingly) must admit that you're absolutely right. There was a time in his life where he was innocent and young and happy. Where he was a part of one of the most prolific foursomes that Hogwarts ever knew. Where it all went wrong, who really knows? But it did go wrong, and I'd like to think that he hated himself until his last breath for letting it happen.
OK, maybe this wound up being a bit longer than I thought it would be. Just to maintain a bit of balance, I noticed a couple of typos that need your loving attention:
And one day, when that child wants to know about his father, when he needs some sort of remind of how much he was loved.. - reminder
He’d tell you not to worry, because _ _ _ just happen. happens
I hope that you're able to shake off the sad Marauder feels soon, but the outcome was truly lovely!
Author's Response: Dan! Having to make two of your amazing review disappear from my unanswered in one day is torture. But I know if I don't get it done now I'll chicken out and stare at it's gorgeousness for a few more days. ah.
That's so much of what I felt while I was writing them. I just wanted to talk about the five of them, all separately, all on their own. I felt like I was sitting in a cafe with someone across from the that said, 'so what can you tell me about Lily? What about the Marauders?' it took all my self control not to add Alice and Frank in, but I had to remember that them being part of it all is in *my* head... not everyone else's :P
I definitely think the brooding nature comes from James. You know Lily... she doesn't really brood. She thinks constantly, and she worries, and if she does brood she hides it too well for anyone but her to see. But I see James as getting himself so exhausted from trying to keep everything okay, that he just crashes. And that's when the amazing friends come in and gah. the sad feels are going to get me again.
Remus was the hardest for me... maybe because there was so much to his life that I wanted to give him enough without giving him too much.
Sirius. My poor, poor Sirius. I just really don't like JKR anytime I have to remember how unnecessary I feel like his death was ;(. Will you get me Sirius for Christmas? PLEASE?
I really, really hope he hated himself, too. Peter that is, not Sirius. He was too destroyed to ever change what he did. I think slowly by slowly as his years as a rat he just because a hardened thing, then when he had to flee and he found Voldemort, he just wanted protection. But I hope so much with those last moments of his life, he remembered everything he once had and he hated himself so much for destroyed those people he loved so much.
Thank you so much for your amazing review, m'dear ♥