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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review, I'm glad that you requested this story, as I've always been meaning to read it, and never having the time, so reviewing this is great!

I knew straight away from the first paragraph that this story would keep me laughing through out, I think the reason was due to the quote 'Lord Voldemortís minions', it just seemed funny that these were running rampant around the school, and this contrasted well with Peony's thoughts, which were generally fluff, so that was funny to read ;D

I loved her first year essay, as it showed the rather snobbish nature of pure bloods, especially with her name! Poor her, those purebloods always have to go around giving annoying names to pronounce!

You put capital letters in some places where I felt they didn't need to be there e.g. headmaster, prefect, it was just a minor thing really, but something which you may wish to correct:)

I thought it was a nice idea to make Peony and Astoria friends, as you never really see much about Astoria's days at Hogwarts so it was nice to see her here!

I'm intriguied by the dark past, as it was just so funny the way Peony was thinking about it, you just wanted to see what her step-mothers reasons for doing so were, as no doubt they would be hilarious!

Even though it was silly I found it hilarious, especially the way she made kissy noises to her finches, as this is parody of Mary-Sue's it was definitely not over done, as that's the point of them, to over do the cliches, as it brings to light how often they appear, and how sometimes bad they are, so I thought the silliness was great!

The presents that the other houses gave were great, but I think that my favourite was the Ravenclaw one, I mean - 'motivational haikus', how on earth did you come up with that? It was just hilarious to imagine the Ravenclaws reading or writing these before exams so it would motivate them to revise! They're just adorable nerds really!

I personally don't think the plot is overdone, though I've come across a lot of parodies, I've never come across one like this, so I thought it brought a refreshing change to my usual reading list!

And the chapter title, awesome is all I can say! As that's what I'd probably think of Peony if I met her!

Summary wise, I'm terrible at them so sorry I can't help there, but I do think there is a topic about it in the forums, so that may help you:)

Overall I thought this was a great chapter, as it made me laugh through out, and it was a really unique idea, and I loved it! Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hi there!

I'll take a look at those capital letters again. I thought I'd gotten that taken care of. The silliness could go really off the board, so I'm glad you found it funny. I'm also relieved that you didn't find the plot overdone.

I'm not sure what made me think of motivational haikus. I just know that if anyone would do it, a Ravenclaw would. :)

Yeah, the summary is my worst thing ever. So are chapter titles and summaries, which is why I decided to go for it and make them as ridiculous as I could muster.

Thanks so much for your thoughts! I hope you can come back for more.

pix


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