Alright, so you were right this chapter was much more intense than the last. So many things, where to start. First, Lucy is a bit insensative, Rose did say NO in the beginning and Lucy wouldn't accept that as an answer so I don't know why she feels that she had to blame Rose entierly. Also just because she didn't like the way things turned out doesn't give her the right to put all the blame on Rose, however I understand that she is hurt so she is probably reacting from the pain, and she had a point about it taking too months and how that time only made her fall more for him, although I don't see how she didn't see this coming everuy time Dave even looked at Rose it was obvious how he felt.
Speaking of Dave, I am interested to see how he is going to respond to what Rose said to him, I want to know what his explination for kissing that other girl is, so I am looking forward to reading that.
Now onto the best part, Rose kissed someone and she wasn't pais, admittedly she had to rationalize her self to do it but still, what a good end to the chapter. I don't think it will mean too much because you have made it clear that she kisses Scorpius all the time and then they go about their merry way, but still, that is unless Scoorpius knows?
Now I want to talk about your writing because i know when I updat I'm interested to see what people thought of my writing skills, and I just want to say you have such talent with words. You can arrange them and morph them in a way that is brilliant beautifully written and flows easly. Also I love how you pull us in and give us just enough to keep us hanging by our toes and coming back for more, bravo. I truly do enjoy reading this story partially for that reason , partially for the way you write it and also because it is a good plot. I hope you don't find that comment weird, I'm a literature major so it's kind of my thing to examin writting skills and word use.
Also thank you for the speedy update, I understand that it can't always be that quick but still it was nice especially since there wasn't much going on in the last chapter. I cannot wait for your next updat, please make it somewhat soon.
Author's Response: Hello EarthsTrueGreen,
Oh Lucy, Lucy, Lucy... I think, as you said, she is reacting from the pain and blaming Rose is currently easier than blaming Dave but Rose was only doing what she asked. Unfortunatly, Lucy is not the most observant person in the world so probably didn't fully pick up on Dave's reactions around her. Maybe Rose shouldn't have taken so long but at the end of the day, she never specified when she would do it and it was still a big ask from Lucy, who should have prehaps given her that time because of her history with Dave. But either way, what's done is done.
Dave is completely confused at the moment. But we will find out more about his feelings and the girl he cheated on Rose with. He'll be mentioned in the next chapter but probably won't feature in it.
The best part? I'm glad you think so, it was certainly fun to write, although I'm never sure if I get it just right. She did have to rationalize it to herself but she could always have refused... couldn't she? Ah, Scorpius, wouldn't you love to get inside his head?
I'm so flattered! Seriously, you probably couldn't have given me a much bigger compliment. I love writing so when people like the way I write, it's so flattering and makes me want to write more. I don't find that weird at all and the fact that you're a literature major makes it an even bigger compliment so thank you so much!
I wish I could update that quickly every time but life just insists on getting in the way. I hope to update by the end of the week (that's the deadline I've set myself but I'm afraid I'm not very good with deadlines) so hopefully I'll hear from you when it gets validated. Again, thank you so much for your review,