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Review:AlexFan says:
I only read the first two paragraphs and I already liked this ghoul. He sounded exactly as some magical creatures would. Maybe that's just me but I thought you did the voice of the ghoul really well.

The whole wanting to be an actor thing is actually a really neat idea and it actually really makes sense. It's fits in perfectly with the idea and if you think about it, why else would a ghoul agree to do that for wizards.

Besides the soft bed, warmth, light and food of course.

You had a bit of a verb tense problem but it didn't interrupt the flow of the writing at all. "We need someone to pretend to be him when he WAS gone." It sounds as if Ron left and has come back already.

Even though the Weasley's weren't the hugest part of this chapter, you still managed to keep them in character. Hermione sounded like Hermione as well (and in a lot of fanfictions she doesn't sound like Hermione at all).

Overall, I thought this was really well written and the chapter flowed really well. Good job on it.

Author's Response: Hi thanks for taking your time to review this story:D No it doesn't sound weird, I thought the same to, as magical creatures don't get a voice much, so I'm giving the ghoul one!

Yeah I think the ghoul's motivations for doing it, is purely to further his career, I don't think he got far ahead enough, to think about the other benefits.

Thanks for pointing that out, I'll go and change it, as I hate grammar errors.

And I'm glad that you thought the Weasley's and Hermione stayed true to their characters, as I really hate it when someone drastically changes how they act!

Thanks again for this review:D


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