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Review:caoty says:
Hi, it's me again.

Geoffrey is just full of surprises, isn't he? Your characterisation of him is refreshing compared to the usual stereotyped Voldemort-supporting werewolves who exist in fic; he's mysterious, and seems to be a rather level-headed and caring kind of guy, despite or maybe as well as possibly being a huge racist.

Speaking of full of surprises, Devlin. Or Dubhán, as he should probably be referred to from henceforth. I Googled that, by the way - 'little dark one' does seem to fit Dubhán well, although I'm kind of hoping he finds himself a more flexible name.

Okay, so I don't have a lot to say about this chapter because this is mostly a build up to whatever's going to happen next. I'm really sorry..

To continue the bad news, your tenses and spelling could do with a bit of work - this was particularly weird in terms of the former:
"Well Geoffrey, now it's your god damn turn to 'prove it'!" Potter's magic, seeping from him, was deep and calm; Geoffrey was reminded of the boys own magic when he hasn't decide if he is furious or not. Potter's voice is demanding and intimidating - Geoffrey has opened a door that can lead either to his safety, because of the importance of his information, or death, because he would be the one person in Harry Potter's grasp who had aided in the imprisonment of Devlin Potter.
I get what you're trying to do, but I think you're using present tense where you should be using conditional, which is confusing.

Anyway, as I'm sure I said in the last review I gave you, this looks like fun and I'm very interested as to how this'll end up. Well done! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah, I know about the tenses - it was originally written in present tense and I think a few things slipped through in the earlier rewritten chapters.

I was wondering who would look up his name ;)

Geoffrey has certainly proven to be an interesting character to shape and portray.

Thanks again!


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