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Review:teh tarik says:
Oh my gosh this chapter certainly takes us to new levels of awkward. And...hello Sarah! Sorry it's taken me quite a few days to come back and review! Bah, real life and all that.

So...somebody needs to whack Oliver on the head. Edie would be a good person to do that :D Sigh, every one of Edie's attempts to look, you know, cool or flirty or unconcerned or whatever, always ends in a lot of cringing on her part :P Anyway, AHA. Is that Oliver beginning to feel attracted to Edie? I like how things are turning out!

But of course, the main highlight of this chapter is Hypatia! Gah, such brilliantly funny characterisation. And seeing her through Edie's eyes, of course, makes things even more hilarious. Hypatia the Artist. Hypatia the Hippie on Herbs. I LOVE her already. All those paintings of lady bits (honestly...Daughter...if I had been drinking tea when I first read that I would have choked.). And despite the loony artist aspect to her character, she's also rather traditional and all - wanting to play matchmaker. Or maybe she's just desperate :P And maybe she has utterly no faith in her daughter. And in Edie's ability to be attractive to anyone. Ah. Whatever it is I love Hypatia heaps and I'm hoping she'll be dropping by in future chapters :)

And Jae Chang :D So far he seems like a very casual, outgoing, cool (maybe) sort of person. Well, I'm not sure - he seems nice! But there's not a lot about him so far so I'm just going to have to sit tight and wait for the pre-arranged date between him and Edie! I can't help wondering what he must have been thinking when Edie pulls Hypatia out and shuts the door on him and he's there alone in Hypatia's house :P Must be somewhat awkward.

OK, one thing that really surprised me is that Edie has siblings! Three younger brothers! I'm not sure if you mentioned this in the earlier chapters - it's been some time since I read them. This new information gave me the sense that Edie might not be the closest to them or to her family. I mean she doesn't seem to think much about her family members. Or perhaps she's a lot more (detached? / aloof? / reserved? what is that pesky word? / [insert appropriate adjective here, I can't seem to find it]) than what I'd originally thought. Er...yes, this is not a very eloquent review. In my defence, it's past 3am where I'm at.

Ooh, well, I have reached the end of your story. So far. And I'm loving it of course! I have so many feels for Edie and for all the awkward people of the universe myself included ahaha :P You totally should update! Or you won't be able to hog any more slots on my review thread :(

OK, can't wait! Until then :D

-teh

Author's Response: Ahhh a lovely surprise! I'm so glad to see another review from you, and I'm sorry I've been hogging your review thread xD

I LOVE HYPATIA. I'm so glad that everyone else seems to like her. I wanted her to be "that overbearing mother" but in a very un-Molly Weasley way. She's a mixture between my mother and my best friend's, too!

I feel like I need to re-write the end of that scene, where she leaves Jae alone in the studio. It is a bit weird, eh? Maybe I'll just clarify that he was going to hang out there to get started on some paintings, or something. I totally agree with you though that it would be awkward for him, in a way that isn't really conducive to the story!

I haven't mentioned Edie's younger brothers, I don't think. And I feel like I really should have. I don't really want it to seem like she's detached from her family; she's just really independent and got out of her small town, and did her own thing. And is bad with keeping up with people (as seen by her mother's post she ignored). But I've actually never considered that maybe a brother or two would live in London... I just feel like there are so many aspects to this story that I keep wanting to put into chapters that are already written! And it keeps elongating it! Which is a good thing, in a way. xD I will take your advice again, because it is so, so, SO helpful, and inject some brother-related things earlier on in the story.

I'm actually about to put the next chapter in the queue right now! So it'll be updated within a week.

Thank you again, so much! You are seriously so helpful, I don't think you even know!


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