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Review:The Misfit says:
Hello! It's me again! And using my actual penname this time, which is sort of a shame - I quite liked Santa In A Dress! :P (And I'm really sorry for how long it's taken me to get to this review, btw!)

I really liked Charlie's internal monologue in this chapter; it was really interesting to see his confusion at aspects of the Muggle world that don't exist in the wizarding world. And that idea of going every day, and then going home if Liz doesn't turn up to work, was excellent!

I'd have liked to have seen a little more about what Charlie does when he isn't at the bar... how does he get money to live on? :3

Your scene with Liz and Jeff was amusing - Jeff is characterized well as the idiot who won't take no for an answer. :P I also enjoyed the moment where Liz thinks about Charlie likes, completely subtracting herself from the list of possibilities, and then being pleasantly surprised when Charlie asked her out! (Walking her home counts as a date, right? Yup, it does!)

I caught a small formatting typo: Now Charlie could actually feel the redness on his face, and it was slowly creeping onto his ears as well. His heart was pounding rapidly, and he found that he could no longer look Liz in the eye. Seeing his reaction gave Liz all the answer she needed.
I knew it! she whispered excitedly. And its someone here, too is it Megan? There should be a space in between the paragraph and Liz's dialogue. :)

And awww. The mention of family, and brothers, and poor Fred! Charlie's thoughts on the situation were extremely realistic - it can be difficult to feel happy knowing that someone else will never have the opportunity to. And what a lovely start to their relationship! ♥

Author's Response: Yay! You're back!! Haha! I really liked Santa in a Dress, too! And no worries, you didn't even HAVE to come back and read/review this so the fact that you chose to is amazing!!

Ah, Charlie's internal monologues! It seems to be his best way of expressing himself here lately! XD

After comments like this from you and other reviewers, I realize that I really SHOULD have put in more information about what Charlie does when he's not at the bar. As far as money, he did have some gold converted at Gringott's before he came to Rhode Island, so that's how he's been surviving thus far, but I really should have explained that, so thank you for pointing it out!!

Haha! Jeff is an idiot. He's one of those characters who really means nothing and just got thrown in there for plot advancement... I'm pretty terrible at that! XD Basically I just needed a reason for Liz and Charlie to start talking about boyfriend/girlfriend type things, and Jeff was the solution! And Yep! Walking her home counts in my book!!

EEK! I'm so glad you pointed that formatting thing! I hadn't even noticed it! Good eye, and thank you for mentioning it!!

Thank you SO much for the amazing review, dear!! ♥ *hugs*

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