|Review:||Gabriella Hunter says:|
*Whine* Girl on the Sidelines, where have you been? I've missed you! *whines*
But aside from that, I'm glad to be back reading this story and catching up with all these characters and their angst! So, the Potter family is being torn apart with what was going on with Al and Vivian and it made me feel really tense knowing how there wsa some distance between them. I enjoyed the fact that James was aware of how much he missed his brother despite what had happened though. It feels like he's growing up a bit and I'm glad that he's trying to branch out on his own with Lou's support.
But things did not go in the direction I thought! Firstly, Lou, I feel sooo badly for her. I hope she gets some good things going soon and I sort of had to pick my jaw up when James admitted to having had a crush on her. But he was so careless about it, saying how he didn't any longer and how he hadn't been in love with her. Poor, Lou. I know that must have destroyed her and I wish that she had said something. God, I wish she had!
But what happened was even more shocking! I didn't think that they would wind up sleeping together and uhm, getting heavy in the process. Goodness, that was something to read! :D
I thought that things were going to progress but you're a tease and stopped it from happening, much to my misery. :(
There was some sweet moments in this and some awkwardness too that I thought you wrote really well. Hahhaa. I hope James and Lou sort of get closer after this though. I really do. :D
There were only a few grammar things but your pacing and such were great! I'm glad that you're back!
On my end, all of my stories are updated and I've got a Percy/Audrey one-shot up for you too! ;)
Hope to see you soon!
Author's Response: Hey Gabbie,
So sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this, I seem to always be busy :( As for where I've been, well life was being a pain.
Albus was a part of their family and now that he's not living with them, there is just this big hole that they are all trying to deal with. On top of that, there is the whole situation surrounding Al's departure. It's quite interesting writing it from Eloise's point of view. It really is time for our Jamsie to grow up I think. He's finished Hogwarts and now has to find his way in the world.
This entire chapter didn't go the way I thought it would! Poor Lou, I do put her through some bad times and I'm afraid to say those bad times are not quite over. The fact that James had a crush on her was news to me to! It just sort of wrote itself and I was like... Okay? I think James wasn't intending to be careless, I think he just didn't want to freak her out and make things awkward. Really, he was just trying to be kind... He just didn't realise that it was the oposite of what she wanted to hear. I think Eloise was too speechless to say anything at all, let alone confess a secret she's been hiding for quite a while now. But I know what you mean!
Well that bit definitely wrote itself. They just sort of fell asleep next to each other and James had been holding her as she cried so they just ended up in that position. Eloise was convinced she was dreaming, bless her. She never would have done it otherwise.
You have no idea how much I wanted things to progress but I just couldn't, it would have destroyed the plot. Maybe next time...
Thank you, I'm glad you like it. I hope they get closer too but as this chapter shows, the finer details of this story tend to write themselves so we will have to wait and see.
I'm glad to be back! And hope to update fairly regularly. I've read The Bad Taste and the one shot but I shall eventually get around to reading the rest, which I am definitely looking forward to!
Thanks for the review and I hope to leave you a couple soonish,