|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
Hey there! Thanks for re-requesting a review!
Wow, this was an unbelievably bizarre and wacky concept! I have certainly never read anything like this before, and I am glad I had an opportunity to do so. It is becoming harder and harder to find unique, completely original stories on this site-and I have certainly never thought to write anything regarding the ghoul in the attic.
What I liked most about this piece was that you managed to connect it to the original Harry Potter books, and put the pieces of the ghouls life together, from everything we know about him-mainly from what Ron has said. I really liked the line: 'So it was one delightful June evening, and I was happily enjoying my evening entertainment of rattling the pipes and trying to get them to harmonise, because when that happened it caused a rather wondrous sound' because I do remember Ron going on about how the ghoul always rattled on the pipes, and it's awesome that you put your own spin on it!
I love the way you started this, with the line: 'You know us ghoulís are often over looked; those imbecile humans always thinking we have inferior intelligence to them, always underestimate their reliance on us.' It was a very nice way too hook the reader in-I could tell immediately that this was going to be something different. And the fact that the ghoul wanted to be an actor-classic! It was a great way of explaining why he agreed to act as Ron, and also added a lot of humour to the chapter. I especially liked the line: 'though they may think Leonardo DiCaprio is the best new actor around, his talents are seriously mediocre when compared to mine.'
I did notice a few spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too distracting-and nothing a simple edit couldn't fix!
Thanks for the funny read.
Author's Response: Hey thanks for taking the time to review my story, and I'm glad that you liked it, and found it wacky and bizarre as that's what I wanted, as I find there's so many stereotypes on HPFF, this probably isn't going to be one! And yeah the idea came to me while trying to fall asleep, and was written in the middle of the night, hence the weirdness :P
Ha yeah, that line from Ron always stayed in my head for some reason, and I just thought hey the ghoul's already wants to be an actor and that's weird enough, why not make him a classical musical fan!
I'm glad that you thought it was good from the start, as that's probably the key thing to do in a story, and how else could they manage to persuade the ghoul to pretend to be Ron, if it didn't want to be an actor. Yeah I had to research new actors of the 90s, due to be being born in the latter end of that decade, so I figured how big Leonardo is, would be funny to show how high the ghoul aspires to.
Yeah I'll fix the spelling and grammar errors soon:)
Thanks again for the lovely review, Kiana :)