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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello again!

Thanks for re-requesting a review, I really love this story! I'm so so sorry it has taken me so long to get around to it, RL has been a pain!

I thought the chapter as a whole was really well written, I loved that you filled in blank spots we don't get to see through following Harry around.

Oh, Fred Colin and Lavender's death. When I realised what Katie was going to find in the empty corridor you almost set me of crying! Fred's death was pretty much the worst for me. I really felt for Katie when she realised she didn't want to live through the battle, I was willing her to fight back! I'm so happy she came through in the end though.

Oliver's thoughts were so heart-wrenching to read. When he thinks he's failed, I just wanted to hug him! He's so so lovely. I really hope the war brings them closer!

This was such a great chapter, and while I don't mind so much it jumped on a few months I would have loved to hear more leading up to the battle and maybe seeing some of Katie's fighting. It's not really a criticism, i just enjoy this story so I want to read more of it!

One other thing, you have 'nbsp;' randomly at the top. I'm guessing it's just a formating error so thought I'd let you know :)

Well done on another great chapter!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hiya!

No worries about taking a while -- RL always comes first :)

I'm really glad you thought the chapter was well written and that the deaths affected you so. That means a lot. :) I won't lie, I felt rather wibbly writing it, so I totally get that.

I was worried I was switching around a bit too much between Oliver's and Katie's perspectives, so yay to you liking Oliver's thoughts.

As for jumping forward a bit too abruptly -- I agree, and I will edit in another scene as soon as I can. I definitely thought something was missing, but writing this story was something I did in binges, lol, and I didn't write it in order or anything, hence why certain parts are slightly disoriented. I will try my best and change that, though. And I'll edit that thing out. Must be a HTML error. :)

Thank you for the review!

Soraya xxx


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