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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review!

I liked the way you started the mystery by insuinating that any one of the red headed men could be Titus's father. It's so hard to not try and guess, as no doubt it won't be George as you would be letting it on too early, and obviously it wasn't Ron, due to you calling him his uncle, but it could be a bluff! So I thought that was really great, how you introduced that in, as it sort of makes the reader interact, and try and match up the clues, so they can figure it out!

Hmm I get what you meant about if being confusing, as I did feel that the whole Ginny thing, was a little weird, as I felt you could have written more in depth about it, so the reader got a clearer idead about what was going on.

I'm glad that you introduced Luna and Xeno into the story, as a lot of people tend to forget how close they live to one another, so it was nice to see the canon facts in there, as that's what makes a story go up onto another level.

I thought your characterization was good, as I found Harry's worrying very believable, as he tends to do that a lot. Also Ron's sulking as he's prone to that as well.

I'm glad that you added in that brief mention of this being after the war, as that clears up whether Fred's alive or not, as I'm guessing he's dead, given George's somber mood, and also it helps keep a time frame for the reader, which prevents them from not getting so confused.

Overall I thought it was a good start, as you've created a lot of mystery over Hermione's son's father, which makes the reader want to continue with it, Kiana :)

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