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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review!

I'm glad that you made Victoire still appear strong, and brave, as those are the 2 key Weasley features, and though her mother failed the second task of the Triwizard tournament she still was pretty awesome, and a lot of people foget about that and make her out to be a wimp, so I was glad to see that you hadn't!

I noticed you gave a capital A for apparating, when I don't think it needs one, as it's not a name of anything, so that may want to be corrected:)

I thought the fight scene was great, even though it was shorter than I expected it to see, it still worked fine, and was very believable, such as Victoire comptemplating whether she should go or not, and you could feel the tension, and the fear in there as well, which was really good!

I thought the way the auror's were working, was also very relalistic and believable, and you could really feel Victoire's pain, and sympathise with her, over the fact that she would have to be the one to track her ex- down.

As for the scene changes, I thought that the transition was smooth, and didn't disrupt from the flow of the overall chapter which was great:D I think the reason why it worked, was because you ended the conversation they were having, so it didn't feel abrupt or stillted.

The only CC I would give is Teddy not being there, as I love him, but that's just me being selfish:P Other than that it was a great chapter, keep up the good work, and feel free to re-request! Kiana

Author's Response: Thanks for stopping by again! :) Your reviews are so lovely and helpful! Teddy will come into the story gradually.

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