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Review:Aiedail says:
first, allow me to say, I have enjoyed the chapter title much more this time, nearly-midnight and post-wine. I know it just literally describes what they're doing but I can't stop giggling

also I always wished they took that bath together do you catch my drift

COME ON RACHEL HE WANTS TO HAVE SOME MIDNIGHT FUNTIMES IN THE BATH IS THAT TOO MUCH TO ASK

"hesitantly, rachel followed suit, acutely aware of how close their faces were to each other. and then CEDRIC KISSED HER FOREVER"

ah the scary moments of this fic are in the quiet moments; everything foreshadows. it's one of the things that i think makes this ced/oc deal hard, because as readers, we want to forget and we want to remember, and you have a good balance of signals that allow us to be both lost in the current text and projecting the storyline forward. which makes for a lot of feels.

and in perfect execution fred and george appear to ease tension. perf.

KISSES KISSES KISSES I LOVE IT

what has happened to me I don't do romance what is going on help

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Author's Response: LOLOL YOU KNOW I HONESTLY DO NOT THINK I EVER GOT THE PUN IN THE TITLE. IF I EVER DID, I'VE FORGOTTEN IT UNTIL THIS MOMENT. BRB DYING. ♥

Whew, okay, that is enough caps for the time being. Please remind me to show you... I hope I still have it somewhere. Sarah might. But I wrote an alternate bath scene for her once, and it's lovely and cracky and I think that you would enjoy it. Also, if you've ever heard Sarah and/or me say PULSE PULSE PULSE that is where it comes from.

LO is where I started getting the drift of putting in those small, painful things that wouldn't look like much of anything unless you knew the end that was in store. :) I do the same thing in Sneth, with James and Lily and Harry, and it's really mean of me but I take small pride in it all the same. I had something in there once about Harry's smooth, soft baby forehead and cackled for like ten minutes.

KISSES, ALWAYS KISSES. I never realized how hard kisses are to naturally write -- everything leads up to the first one and then it's... normal? I'VE NEVER BEEN KISSED OKAY, I DON'T KNOW HOW THIS WORKS.

Romance for all. ♥


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