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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hello, Elphaba back again. :)

I love that you opened the chapter with this particular flashback! It answered my questions about Oliver's feelings for Katie -- an old unrequited school crush that he'd buried until she popped back into his life.

I also like how the conversation between the two of them seems so natural, especially as she tells him about Leanne. I had wondered why she would be hanging out in muggle bars, and that is explained as she talks to him. You've clearly taken great care to ensure that everything fits together logically.

The one question I have now is about the timeline of the story. After Katie had to flee her flat to avoid the Snatchers that killed Leanne, I assume that she would have had to find a new flat. Would her current flat have had time to accumulate the clutter that is described in this chapter?

Once again, grammar, punctuation and spelling are clean. I'm enjoying this story, and will be back to read more!

Author's Response: Hi again! :D

Yayy, it makes me so happy when I manage to answer someone's questions by what I write rather than what I say :) It is basically just that, an unrequited schoolboy crush that Oliver never quite got over. Things will get... interesting for them later, I can assure you :)

I really take pride in my dialogue -- it's one of the few things I think I'm good at in writing, so I'm glad you thought it was natural! I also didn't want to have a major info-dump, because I know I don't like reading that, so I thought it would be better if Katie's backstory was explained by Katie herself.

Okay, hmm, interesting question. Leanne was killed two weeks before the events of this chapter and last, and in that time, Katie did manage to find a new flat. I don't know about you, but I can make clutter appear in about five minutes, lol, especially if I've arrived somewhere new and have unpacked (read: spilled everything on the floor).

I'm really glad the SPaG is up to scratch -- as a grammar Nazi and with two lovely betas, I've tried my best with grammar and spelling, so thank you. :) Thank you also for the lovely review!

Soraya xxx

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