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Review:aquabluez17 says:
Hey! Im Mya =) Just wanted to drop a few suggestions here to maybe get your reading going you know?

I really love this story, I do! It's just that it feels to disjointed at points. From Chp1 to 4 I feel quite disjointed at points which makes me it hard for me to really get into the flow of the story if you know what I mean?

I suggest a Beta who could help you see the parts that are making the story seem like skipping stones rather than ice rink :P

Great update though =) Al seems to really love Sophia!

Author's Response: Heya,
thanks so much for the helpful review. I'm still also working on getting into the story which I know sounds kinda weird, like why start a story if you arent into it but I just do. Hopefully the chapters are going to start getting less disjointed. Its also kinda hard when the chapters are in the POVs of two different characters, but don't worry, I am working on it :)
Anyways, thanks for the review and I hope you see and improvement on the next few chappies :)

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