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Review:peanuts11 says:
This is so interesting.

It's like nothing I've read on here before.

I must admit that I am guilty of reading different variations of the same type of story on HPFF and so when i saw this story, it did intrigue me.

I really like the implied bond between Devlin and Harry. Sometimes, It's so hard to read about the relationship between a parent and their children because it comes across quite cheesy but within the context of this story and the way it was written, it almost brought a tear to my eye.

There are some things that I'm confused about. Like Sirius' existence, Harry's wife and Voldemort but I'm so interested in the story that I can't wait to understand what the deal is with the non-compliance.

I was really shocked that Devlin was only 4 or 5 years old as he comes across a lot older in the torture scenes. Although, I'm sure there is a reason for this. I just think that any 4 year old would be a lot more child-like and perhaps scared/confused.

That being said, he is the son of Harry Potter so...

I really like the storyline and so my only, minute criticism would be to reread before posting because some of the sentences just need a little reworking.

Otherwise, amazing!


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad I managed to pull of the father/son thing without coming across as cheesy - I totally agree!

Sirius's AU. Harry was never possessed by Voldemort in this story. Things haven't gone the same here as they did there. You'll find out more about that later, though.

As to Devlin being not being childish enough...I'm going to add an A/N to the first chapter to cover this a bit. But I'll paste what I said to another reviewer here as well, in the meantime. "The aspect of Devlin seeming older than he is has two tracks: one it is very hard to write a coherent sentence if I made it all HAVE to be at the level of a four years old thought pattern and two, there are some underlying plot points that will later explain some of his reactions."

Thanks so much! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

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