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Review:caoty says:
Hi, I'm here from Tag.

Okay, so I love AUs like this so this was perfect for me to read, and as such this review will contain a lot of gushing.

(This is also going to be a bit of a rolling review, btw.)

Devlin has the thought processes of a kid who's around ten or eleven, rather than the younger age you were probably going for. I get that he's a prodigy and all, but... still. I'm reserving judgment for now, because he seems like an interesting kid.

The reference to antipsychotics is... interesting. I'm tempted to link your AU to canon by theorising that he's some sort of human manifestation of the Harrycrux, but I don't know if they exist here.

You've got some weird descriptions:
his blonde hair glittering under the starry night
...is Draco Malfoy Edward Cullen in disguise? (Do Twilight's vampires' hair glitter? I don't know, but you get my point.)

Moving on. Voldemort's characterisation is excellent; he's sadistic and enjoyable to read. The hair-trigger temper and schadenfreude correspond to canon (which is actually rare enough to be remarkable, sadly, as I'm sure you know) and he's got some great dialogue:
"Come now, you must be as bored as I. Scream so we may get this part over with."
made me giggle.

Your less-innocent Harry is also a joy to read - you've written my favourite kind of Harry. He's not the most rational person in the world, but he does what he believes is right, he loves his family to pieces... it's great, and it'll be great to see how the interaction between him and our very very interesting mysterious new Death Eater develops. Or, alternatively, what Harry and Sirius do to him in the next chapter.

Dear Lord, that cliffhanger. Wow. Poor Harry. (And poor Alexandra, when she gets home.) This is a very good start to one of the better AUs I've seen in my (fairly short, mind you) time here, so well done, and you'll probably see me around in the future. :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I love gushing ;)

The aspect of Devlin seeming older than he is has two tracks: one it is very hard to write a coherent sentence if I made it all HAVE to be at the level of a four years old thought pattern and two, there are some underlying plot points that will later explain some of his reactions.

I had to think for a moment when you mentioned 'antipsychotics' but then I remembered where you would have gotten that. I suppose 'antipsychotics' might be as close as you come to an accurate guess, except that there is another clue 'wolfish' to explain what it is all for. On that note, a wolf would have some instincts about fearful situations that a four year old might not...I'll leave it at that.

I haven't read or seen the Twilight series, so I have no clue about how my description of Draco's hair would link to that - it just seemed like what a four year old might notice in his circumstance. As you can tell, he was injured prior to the story opening, healed, and now he's being dragged through 'somewhere', behind the only person without a mask - he can't see his face and everyone else is black, so I figured Draco's hair would stand out.

I did very much enjoy writing Voldemort. ;) I liked his ending the best, because it was the only way I could imagine him not just killing the boy there and then - to save face and because HE hadn't gotten what he wanted yet - the scream.

I can't imagine Harry being any other way in this universe and I'm glad he came across as believable.

Thanks for the review and I hope to see you around again. :)


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