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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
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This looks like an interesting idea for a story. Most pregnancy stories I see involve kids that are still at Hogwarts, so it's a nice change to see one where the characters are older and married.

If I may make a couple suggestions, one would be kind of minor, and that would just be paying more attention to details. There were a couple points where it mentioned "Muggle" devices like clocks, and I think that it just might help to remember that it's Harry Potter and that there is magic involved.

Also, the ending felt a little abrupt. I understand that you wanted to have a cliffhanger, but in this case, I thought it felt like the scene just stopped in the middle.

You did a good job of introducing Albus' character and his relationship with Ruby, and it will be interesting to see where things go from here.

Author's Response: Hi!

I am glad you liked the story =)

Oo right off course. though honestly I feel that Al would still have a clock and Ruby is a muggle born witch so it seems like it would be right

ahah! I must have got caught in the whole story and not realized how aburt it was.

Thank you! I am glad you liked it =)

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