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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hello! Here I am again-sorry this review took a little longer than usual.

Have I ever told you that you write like a professional author? I probably have, but I feel the need to say it again: you write like a complete professional and I feel so privileged to be reading and reviewing your writing! All the descriptions you use are spot on and flow perfectly, and you are amazing at developing characters. I know for certain I've said this before but I really, really wish writing came as easily for me as it sure does for you!

Anyway, onto the chapter. I liked the way you started it-particularly the first paragraph. The lines: 'Like being wrapped in a warm towel after swimming in the freezing ocean. Like drinking something cold after a period of blistering thirst' were particularly good because they really gave me a sense of how Brienne feels to be with her parents-gave me something to relate to. And because one of those parents are now gone, it must feel even better to be with her father-who seems like an awesome character, by the way. I'd love to have a father like that!

The descriptions of her father's house were lovely. You made it seem like a very comforting place-one Brienne could easily feel at home in and I think she needs that. I also really enjoyed the scene where Brienne and her father were cooking a meal together. It was a nice touch and showed that they have a very close relationship. I liked the little details that you added into this sequence, such as how 'her Mother had not been a dab hand in the kitchen, and her exploits in the culinary side of things turned out acceptable at best' and how her father was 'not the most coordinated of wizards to operate a kitchen.' Details like this make Brienne's life seem so real-I honestly imagine her as a living, breathing character.

Brienne and her father's conversation at the dinner table was a great addition to this chapter. Douglas' line: “Got any, um, boyfriends on the quiet?” was perfect-it was such a dad thing to say, and Brienne's slightly weary reaction was great, too.

I also loved the way you talked about how Douglas and Brienne's mother met. It was a nice reflection on 'the old days' and I really liked how you mentioned Remus and his 'mates' joined the Order of the Phoenix. That was a really nice touch!

Poor Brienne. Her mother's death has clearly been very tough for her, but I'm so glad her father is a comfort in these rough times. I'm interested to learn more about this investigation, and finding out a little more about what is going on! You do a great job keeping the mystery and suspense in your writing.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi! How I would love to be a professional author! xD All I've achieved in that sense is a letter about fanfiction printed in a writing magazine. But thank you so much, that's so kind :)

I like Brienne's dad's house too xD Typically English and cosy. Brienne fits in well there, and her and her father obviously adore each other.

You will get some answers soon! Thank you again so much for the wonderful review!


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