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Review:caoty says:
Hey. *waves* So here I am, finally fulfilling my end of the Gryffie Review Exchange.

Hufflepuff is probably my favourite House - I'm a bad Gryffindor, I know - and so it's always nice to see them getting recognition. Anyway. Onto the actual review.

I like your use of colour imagery here. Green in Harry Potter is, obviously, the colour of the Killing Curse, and so throughout this one-shot it reminds me uncomfortably of what will have happened to Cedric by the time we get to the end.

Cedric's voice is great, too. Despite the short-ish length of this, I've got a real sense of his personality and emotions, the qualities associated with Hufflepuff - The decision was easy though, girl or glory? Girl trumps every time. was a particularly lovely example of that - it just works really well.

To answer the question in your A/N, I'm not sure how insecure he'd feel about Harry's crush on Cho, or even to what extent he'd know about it. He is, after all, a pretty awesome guy to just about everyone - he sees Harry for what Harry is, which is an ordinary fourteen-year-old who gets shoved into extraordinary situations - not much of a threat, really. And, being awesome, he probably trusts Cho enough so that he'd assume she wouldn't cheat on him with Harry anyway. So I think your characterisation's alright.

Moving on. Could you please fix the spacing in this one-shot? It's a bit weird, and it's messing with my ability to read your fic. Also, you're a bit inconsistent with your use of contractions - lines like:
I cannot escape it.
seem a bit too formal, and consequently OOC.

Anyway. Well done, and I'll see you round on the forums. :)

Author's Response: Hello :)

Thank you for the review!

I'm really happy you liked the use of the colour green and Cedric's voice. The fact you said you got a good sense of his personality makes me really happy as I was worried I wouldn't get it right.

Yeah, I agree that he probably trusts Cho and he is pretty decent with Harry but still, if I could tell someone liked my bf I still would feel a little protective and jealous no matter how much I didn't show it or how much I trust him. That's what I was trying to get through anyway. I mean Harry's the saviour of the wizarding world and famous... it must be hard to compete.

Hmm the spacing gets on my nerves too, and trust me, I have tried to fix it a few times - honest. It still manages to create extra spaces I'm sure. I will go back and try again though. I've also noted your other point and will maybe look at changing a few of the lines when I get chance.

Thanks again for the review!

Lauren :)

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