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Review:aquabluez17 says:
Hey! Im Mya for your requested review =) Nice to meet you!

So you hav a GREAT beginning here. From my POV, I see a very hurt Charlie who feels that he is responsible for his brothers death, though I was a bit confused as to how? Was Charlie even in the battle? I thought he wasn't? Maybe that's what you are alluding to that if he had been there he could have helped... Lol anyway, I really like the relationship you have of Bill/Charlie here and would love to see some interaction between Charlie/George maybe.

This was a great start! I loved the way you brought us in and really loved the fact that you wrote this from Charlie's POV since I hav never really read that before !

I woud love to see what else you have =)

I felt that the somber feeling could have been enhanced by some description of Charlie's surroundings but his guilt was done very well.

Overall great job!

If you ever need another review you know where to find me :D

-Mya :D

Author's Response: Hi Mya! Thank you for getting to this so quickly!! :)

I am so glad to know that you think this is a great beginning! I realize that the reasons for Charlie's guilt are a little unclear in this chapter, but I promise it's explained very well in the next one! (And I'll be sure to go re-request so that you can see for yourself!) I haven't quite gotten to any Charlie/George communication yet, because looking at George would remind Charlie too much of Fred, but it's coming soon! I promise!!

I honestly hadn't really read from Charlie's POV before either, which is one of the reasons I chose to write about him! :P

Your comment about the description is well-noted! And I'm glad that you think the guilt and grief were portrayed well.

Thank you SO much for such an amazing review!!


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