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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review! Yay another chapter!

I was intriguid by the introduction to this, I wonder why Lizzie may have not finished university, and why Mark may have become a father, I hope that we find out later, as I hate not knowing something! I always find it so fascinating to see how much James changed Lydia.

I was so sad to see that Lydia had been ignoring James, despite the awful first date, he still wanted to see her which was adorable! It shows how lovely he really is, and I really like this James compared to the other James II's, he is by far the best, he's just so different to the other ones it's such a refreshing change, to see him as a more mature, and caring person, very much like Harry I guess!

I also like how you made Lydia, a normal, relatable person who does have several flaws! It just makes it so much nicer to to read, knowning that she is some superwoman, who can get all the guys, but in fact doesn't make the best decisions.

I felt sorry for Lydia opening the door to 'James Thompson', in her Hufflepuff t-shirt and shorts, especially after that awkward dinner date last time. Well maybe this will diffuse the tension, as he would have seen her in her natural enviroment.

A few CC's, you mentioned eye glasses at one point, it sounded a little odd to me, and I think if you just said glasses it would sound much better :) Also you said waiter once when I think you meant waitress, I hope you did otherwise I don't think Mark would be too happy!

Overall I thought this was an adorable chapter, and thank you for the little mention in the author note I feel very honoured, and I do hope you win :') I can't wait to see what happens next, with that cliff hanger ending!

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review! Your just fabulous! It certainly will get much more awkward and silly but the chapter happens to be quite...romantic :) Thanks again!

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